Light of the moon
Moves west, flowers' shadows
Creep eastward.
this one is interesting because it tells a good story about the moons moment at night.  it also flows very well.

From across the lake,
Past the black winter trees,
Faint sounds of a flute. 
this one was interesting because it has suspense and it flows very well

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